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PoetrySinger Member
since 2006-10-16
Posts 54 |
At the start of I had the ball I looked around and made the call With a fast break and a fancy dribble I thought I was doing good until I saw coach scribble She held up sign that said "watch the travel" Cause this outside court is full of gravel I said Ok and continued to run Cause outside or inside basketball is fun! |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
Love the beginning but it is short. And the ending is forced ryming. |
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yvetters_24 Member
since 2006-08-27
Posts 52california |
kwelness i love bball to like the poem but short and i agree the end sounds like u forced it just think of how much love bball when u write it will be easyer |
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