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Teen Poetry #8

Have I Been Forgotten

Clockwork_Orange
Senior Member

since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

0 posted 2007-10-30 06:25 PM

Have i been forgoten
Has vanity left me behind
Am i just a lost cause
Thats just not worth the time

Ive fallen further from the heard
They've gone and flown away
Leaving me all alone
With nothing left to say

Im worthless
Im stupid
And Deffinently not cupid

Im rude
Im conceited
But if i say it then i mean it

So please dont go
Please dont leave
What would make you believe

That im trying so hard
To make you see
I want you to be mine

But i dont know what to say
Every time i try, i look away

Because i choke up every time you speak
And i really miss you every time you leave

So here it is
And now you know
I dont want you to go

I want you here
In my arms

RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

1 posted 2007-10-31 01:01 AM

Hmm.. I think its great as always but yea im really confused at this.. maybe cause i don't know if this is meant for me.. Do me a favor add me to msn: feral_til_death@hotmail.com

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

2 posted 2007-11-02 02:38 AM

hmmm... it was had a good rhythm to it. i liked that. honestly, the beginning made me laugh a little. I dont know if it was supposed to, but it did. I don't mean to cause offense, but it did. Check your spelling in a few spots. Keep writing, you only get better!

Alaina
Member

since 2007-06-16

Posts 106

3 posted 2007-11-02 11:49 PM

i love your poems so much, you're an amazing writer

I know you'll be a sun in somebody else's sky, but why can't it be mine?
-Eddie Vedder

surf_painter
Member

since 2007-04-10

Posts 434
Canada

4 posted 2007-11-03 07:08 PM

wow this was amazing and it is actually something i would love to say to another wow you caught everything i was feeling in your poem... good for you i loved how well it was written

justanotherstorm
Member

since 2007-10-24

Posts 321

5 posted 2007-11-03 07:10 PM

this is cool i like the flow of your words this means a lot

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

6 posted 2007-11-12 10:04 PM

enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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