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Teen Poetry #8

My one romeo

Angel101¢¾!
Junior Member

since 2007-10-21

Posts 48
Lost in pain

0 posted 2007-10-21 07:16 PM

You are Romeo a gift from above but i am not juliet because i am not the one you love.I see you sit,waiting for your girlfriend.I wish one day i can be more than just your friend.I hear the wind and think of you and all the ways that i love you.I wish one day that you'll see that you are the only one for me.¢¾¢¾¢¾¢¾¢¾¢¾¢¾

rebelangelv
Senior Member

since 2007-05-28

Posts 538
usa

1 posted 2007-10-21 07:41 PM

wow short but sweet me likey a lot.

good job

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
Senior Member

since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

2 posted 2007-10-21 08:30 PM

not to be the mean guy, but i think if you formed it in a more stanza oriented way it would be easier for people like me to get the flow and ryhme patteren. but i did like the content, but maybe work on stanzas so it shows your flow better.

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