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Lover's Embrace (Senryu)
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Lover's Embrace (Senryu) |
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Suncleaver Member
since 2009-01-18
Posts 481Stafford England 
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Lover cries softly In the bitter closing night, Gentle arms embrace. Dedicated to Shannon Rose Kelly, my beloved. [This message has been edited by Balladeer (02-17-2009 07:54 PM).] |
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gilead Senior Member
since 2008-03-10
Posts 1067nevada, USA |
Hi, Suncleaver. I like the contrast between love's softness, and the bitterness of the night. I also love the immediacy of the haiku form---much spoken in few words in a brief passage of time. art |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Suncleaver - when lovers cry softly, a tender embrace is heavenly. Nice write that leaves nice thoughts... BC |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Suncleaver, This is a very good Senryu poem. While Haiku deals with nature, Senryu deals with humans. Bobby |
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Suncleaver Member
since 2009-01-18
Posts 481Stafford England |
Thank you for your appreciation guys. But Bobby, isn't the senryu form usually scathing or ironic? *post edit* My apologies Bobby, you are indeed correct. A senryu form doesn't have to be ironic but it does have to be human. Thank you for broadening my knowledge on this subject. Never sigh for a better world, it's already composed, played and told. |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
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Suncleaver Member
since 2009-01-18
Posts 481Stafford England |
Yes! It worked. I've been trying to teach myself HTML for 3 days! Finally, a picture... Never sigh for a better world, it's already composed, played and told. |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
very enjoyable read, I have to learn HTLM too. regards yann |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
That is a lovely painting of you and your beloved!   A softly spoken senryu.  May your Valentine's Day be a loving one!   EA |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Very nice senyru and you captured the feeling brilliantly. |
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Suncleaver Member
since 2009-01-18
Posts 481Stafford England |
Thank you very much for your kind comments guys. My only regret is that I won't be able to spend this special day with her as she's studying in Scotland. But the strength and love of my heart will carry across all the miles, and she knows that. Love will conquer all, it is the only thing I belive in. I live my life for her gentle smile and beautiful laughing eyes. Without her I am nothing, an empty man and an inspirational void. She fills the hollow of my soul. I wish each of you well on this day granted by love's grace. Never sigh for a better world, it's already composed, played and told. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
A pleasure to read....James |
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