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sewasham
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0 posted 2009-02-07 08:26 PM


Shandamaire

Beyond the dark t’ward light of day
There is a land far, far away
This place is known as Shandamaire
A little castle’s nestled there

Around this castle dark and tall
There is a garden still and small
The flowers there no longer bloom
Within their little garden room

But it was not so long ago
That you could see the flowers grow
The blossoms there were bold and bright
While welcoming the morning light

T’was then a princess young and fair
Strolled the grounds of Shandamaire
All of the birds and creatures small
Would answer to her lilting call

The princess loved her favorite toys
A dancing doll that brought her joys
With a button where one eye had been
And a sturdy soldier made of tin

The kingdom loved the charming lass
With hair of gold and skin like glass
And everything was perfect there
In the lovely land of Shandamaire

Then came an evil prince one day
To steal the princess’s land away
At first he tried to win her heart
But with her land she would not part

He decided then to make her leave
So as the kingdom knelt to grieve
He’d take it for his very own
And seat himself upon its throne

He chased the girl with golden hair
Through hallways in the castle there
Out to the garden she did flee
And begged the prince to let her be

The soldier and the dancing doll
Heard their tiny princess call
And hurried to the garden path
To stop the evil prince’s wrath

Next to the garden’s old stone wall
The princess saw the dancing doll
But the doll and soldier were too late
To save her from her awful fate

The evil prince gave her a shove
And rocks fell down from up above
The sturdy soldier made of tin
Kept the wall from falling in

But while he held the wall in place
A smile came to the prince’s face
He took the girl with golden hair
And left the land of Shandamaire

And now within the garden small
A rusting soldier holds a wall
Through winter snow and summer rains
Sturdy and stout he still remains

And high atop that garden wall
Are the remnants of a dancing doll
Its face you see is never dry
As a tear falls from its button eye

Eternally they stand and wait
For their princess by the garden gate
And if you look they still are there
In the far off land of Shandamaire


© Copyright 2009 Stephen E. Washam - All Rights Reserved
Robert E. Jordan
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since 2008-01-25
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1 posted 2009-02-07 09:21 PM


Yo Steven,

You mean rotten stuffs happening in Shandamaire?

I certainly hope not.

This is fine writing.

Bobby


Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16
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2 posted 2009-02-07 10:06 PM


This is a beautiful, sad story with more to it than meets the eye. I hope someday there will be a happy ending.
                                   Ida

ethome
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3 posted 2009-02-08 12:23 PM


Off with that evil prince's head!

Lovely little tale.....Well crafted. Held me to the page rushing to the finale.....So sad.

Eric

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4 posted 2009-02-10 12:38 PM


This is so sadly wonderful.  I love this story.

A

Suncleaver
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since 2009-01-18
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5 posted 2009-02-10 02:17 AM


A lovely poem, yet sad.

Never sigh for a better world, it's already composed, played and told.

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27
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6 posted 2009-02-10 01:11 PM


Your fairy tale poems are among the best of this genre that I have every read. You know I'm a fan of all your writing, but your fairy tales really appeal to the little girl in me.


Linda


Sunshine
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7 posted 2009-02-10 01:32 PM


As I read this, Steve, my thoughts were
drawn to the fantasy of Oz and its land. As
you know, Frank Baum based his story
on the lead stories of his own time,
based on the banking and railroad matters,
factory work, and political candidates of
his day. I thought for a moment you were
going down a similar road.

Truly enjoyed it as a children's poem,
and also I'm fairly well convinced some
underlying overtones of "other worldly matters".  

Good job!


LindsayP
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since 2007-07-28
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Australia, Victoria
8 posted 2009-02-10 09:29 PM



My good friend Steve, you are in a class of your own when it comes to fairy tales for

that was a delight to read and read again.
Top accolades for that one. Thank you.

Lindsay

gilead
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since 2008-03-10
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nevada, USA
9 posted 2009-02-10 10:40 PM


A sad, sweet story, told by a master!

Enjoyed immensely, Steaven!

art

steavenr
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10 posted 2009-02-11 10:21 PM


I, too, enjoyed it as if it were a children's book, complete with vivid illustrations and colorful pages...very nicely done
Margherita
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11 posted 2009-02-12 04:42 PM


What a fantastic tale, but you must write the sequel please, we want to know about the fate of the princess with golden hair.

You are a master in fairy tales, no doubt, dear Stephen.

Love,
Margherita

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