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Osprey
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0 posted 2009-05-15 05:19 PM



I raced with a monkey on the moon,
but the dust got in our eyes.
So we traded weightless smalltalk,
jousted with our lies.
Though he was monkey proud and male,
there came a reaching out as friends.
The lies gave way to mutual trust
on which all friends depend.
He spoke of evolution,
and if I'd lend an ear,
he'd prove to me that apes were not
the first of us sent here.
He told me of a human race
from which he had evolved,
said Darwin wasn't really wrong,
he'd left it just half-solved.
He said:
' Cruelty is the bane of man
as onward he exists,
but acknowledgement is not the way,
hypocrisy persists.
That fault of man, is simply he,
is ever doomed to fail,
for he seeks too many answers;
there is no Holy Grail.
A universal spiral is spinning in the null;
man will come, and he will go:
My eyes?
Do you see the cull?'

[This message has been edited by Osprey (05-17-2009 05:32 AM).]

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1 posted 2009-05-15 05:26 PM


"said Darwin wasn't really wrong,
he'd left it just half-solved."

Heh, very cool poem. I enjoyed it muchly.

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2 posted 2009-05-15 07:59 PM


and everybody's got something to hide except for me and my monkey?



Enjoyed this, with its twisty turns.


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3 posted 2009-05-15 11:06 PM


Very cool writing here, Osprey.  You gave me something to think about as I wander away for a bit.

Thank you.
A

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4 posted 2009-05-15 11:39 PM


Great humor, great message
Liked the metaphor of monkey on the moon.

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5 posted 2009-05-17 02:49 PM


Interesting write,
                Ida

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6 posted 2009-05-17 03:06 PM


Enjoyed this monkey's tale...we are doomed to cling to a swinging tail while searching for that elusive grail.
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7 posted 2009-05-18 09:45 PM


Yo dear Osprey,

This is cleverly pessimistic.  It’s amusing in its way.  I always knew that the man in the moon was all alone.

Love Bobby

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8 posted 2009-05-19 02:50 AM




Very clever I enjoyed it.
Billie C.

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