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Juju
Member Elite

since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

0 posted 2009-05-09 07:27 PM

I AM

I am outside and looking in
I wonder if I have what it takes to change
I hear the sound of wind rankle my body
I see my own worst enemy staring back at me
I am outside and looking in

I pretend to be independent and free from others opinions
I feel my lies eating away my stomach
I touch the oak window sill and feel the varnish peeling away
I cry when the loneliness sets in
I am outside and looking in

I understand itâ€™s my fault
I say they wouldnâ€™t let me in
I dream of being loved beyond my pretty face and illusions
I try to fight these old habits of putting myself down
I hope for many things like change
I am outside and looking in

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

1 posted 2009-05-09 07:39 PM

Yo dear Juju,

This poem works good. I think you're way cool.

Love Bobby

sandgrain
Member Elite

since 1999-09-21

Posts 3662
Sycamore, IL, USA

2 posted 2009-05-09 09:45 PM

A neat perspective. Yet this sounds more like you're 'inside, feeling'
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"I pretend to be independent and free from others opinions
I feel my lies eating away my stomach
I touch the oak window sill and feel the varnish peeling away
I cry when the loneliness sets in"
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However, I really enjoyed this piece.

God bless,
Rae

Huan Yi
Member Ascendant

since 2004-10-12

Posts 6688
Waukegan

3 posted 2009-05-10 07:03 PM

.

"I dream of being loved beyond my pretty face and illusions"

Or make the best use of them . . .
and be loved.

John
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Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

4 posted 2009-05-12 02:18 AM

Juju, I like your poetry and I like seeing a bit more inside you. You use words really well and write some powerful poem. This is one.

Alison

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

5 posted 2009-05-12 10:26 PM

I echo John and confirm with AYE!!!

(and do check out Grand Funk Railroad's "Inside Looking Out") --write me, I'll make that easy for ya. And yanno? My kids used to wake for grade school to that one...laughing.

yer lovely

NOW CELEBRATE!!!

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

6 posted 2009-05-13 06:46 AM

Juju, you are beautiful inside and out and you probably have more who think that and love you than you know or can see.

M

Anniepimm
Senior Member

since 2008-12-26

Posts 550
England

7 posted 2009-05-13 07:36 AM

Awwww that is sad I know that feeling all to well, excellent poem I enjoyed it

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