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Death struggle in the gas chamber
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Death struggle in the gas chamber |
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rad802 Member
since 2008-04-19
Posts 279KY U.S.A. 
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There have been clues but nobody wants to believe it, nobody wants to hear that they are going to be murdered. They are brought by the hundreds and told to disrobe for the showers. The worst of it over, the standing for hours. They are stripped of all hope, worn and humbled they go where they're led. All day in a rail-car they'll soon have a bed. Then it comes and those nearest the shower-heads crash and bleed out. They rush for the doorway some starting to shout. In the darkness the man does not know that he stands on his child. Death starts at the bottom, the bodies are piled. The fierce struggle is brief but continues as long as there's air. As they die they must murder not willing to share. As the doors are then opened the pile of bodies spill out. None survived none forgiven all sin and all doubt. In this pile were the sins of many the last of these sins purchased only a moment more life and in the end achieved nothing. Rick Delmonico [This message has been edited by rad802 (03-13-2009 09:45 AM).] |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
quite the rant..but an interesting "insight" |
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Marc-Andre Senior Member
since 2008-12-07
Posts 501 |
Rick, the numerous anapestic feet speed up your piece in a way that enhances its chilling feel, giving dizzying speed to its dizzying theme. A good, insightful writ. Mark |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
A piece of history that just makes me just so ashamed as a human being. A powerful rant indeed about something all too true. |
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unboundpoetess Member
since 2008-05-24
Posts 477 |
Odd that I ran across this today. I was just having a discussion with my best friend about a movie this reminds me of. Maybe it's called Gray Zone? Unsure. Anyway, powerful images here. Heather |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
I just rented a movie, titled "Boy In The Stripped Pajamas," it was about the very same thing as your poem.... It was a great movie, it is new, I recommend everyone watch it.... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"In the darkness the man does not know that he stands on his child." I'm thinking on this line, and I can't decide if this is hell, or a small mercy... (probably a mercy, since the man doesn't know...) But that's just the literal reading, too. A good line, there. It has certain implications that are not so comfortable, but thoughtful, nevertheless. |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
ARH: I watched the same movie last night and now your poem Rick has reminded me exactly what the movie was about... very moving, very sad, very real... love and hugs RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
You made my thoughts wander to that mass murder, which still meant individual coping with death in a horrible way. I stayed such a long time in silence here that the monitor went black and I jumped. May men evolve and awaken to love. Thank you for this. Love, Margherita  |
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angellea Member
since 2009-03-29
Posts 144NC, USA |
Absolutely riveting. Thanks for not letting us forget that tragedy. |
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