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of cotton in a silver spoon |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I run the water very hot then I add some cold from tap-- I hold my fingers in the spout until I cannot feel no more... I fill the tub with that. And then? I slide down the back-bent wall listening to the sounds of house thinking "home, sweet home..." |
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tao power Member
since 2009-02-24
Posts 109 |
ok, favorite poet, I didn't like this one as much. That's not to say it isn't good, it's just my humble opinion. I am thrown by the double negative in the last line of the 1st stanza. "cannot feel no more"? Are you just using vernacular, or was it an accidental grammatical error? |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
*smile* It's okay. I don't like a lot of things. The double negative was intentional. It has to do with the intent of meaning behind the poem... erasing one's self, that might be a double negative, yanno? I honestly hope you don't.  Dream sweet, lovie.  |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Cotton in a spoon? You are not needling us are you? *GRINNNN* the soft surprise of true relaxation... |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
a softly packed punch. did you have bubbles and candles? "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very well put  |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I just bought this thing that covers that emergency drain, so no water escapes. I happen to think that a bubblebath is a luxury I deserve, and won't let anyone take my bubbles, or adjust the level of my "think tank." Cute Karenity. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: That is a major ingredient for a truly relaxing and inspiring bath! Wonderful. Love, Margherita |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Ah the relaxation as the stress levels diminish for a while. Home sweet home indeed. Eric |
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tao power Member
since 2009-02-24
Posts 109 |
icebox makes a good point! This poem could be about doping the veins. It takes on a whole new light when I read it this way. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Y'know, your short ones have as much a punch as your epic writes.  Sis |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
After nearly overdosing by teams of professionals, I do believe I have lost my taste for "the taste".  A nice mineral bath will do just fine now, thank you. I'm starting to feel like my old self again I think. But I don't think I wanna go that far back.  Thanks for reading--and yanno? I wish I could take this thing with me sometimes. I used to love to read in the bathrub. *pout* |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Now I need to take a nice warm bubble bath. Especially nice since I've been working in tha yard. Ida |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
fine 'slice of life' impressionism! (and minimalistically most effective) applause!! |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
yes...double positive...yes (and the world slips silently by) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You are all so lovely--so kind. I thank you humbly. (Y'think I should go out?) *laughing* lawds-i-luvs-ya |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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